Please rewrite the words highlighted in red in this essay (located in files). I

Please rewrite the words highlighted in red in this essay (located in files). I

Please rewrite the words highlighted in red in this essay (located in files). I have attached comments from my instructor regarding changes I should make to the text highlighted in red. If it dosen’t seem clear, she seems to think that the text in red dosen’t follow the rest of the essay, like there is no new information backing up what was said previously in the essay.  She also is saying that there is many paragraphs that seem to repeat the same idea or sentence.  Our claim is that abortion is better for the society as a whole, ethically speaking. I have attached the two sources I used (About Philosophy Textbook & Thomson source), if needed, to read and add some useful information to the make the essay better. 
Files: 
PNG’s and JPG- showing teachers feedback 
Essay 2 Draft (docx.)- The essay shown in full, with the red text highlighted
About Philosophy & Thomson- sources I used for the paper